Just ooooone question:
Given that one reason he hated the gods was due to the fact he himself was imprisoned for so long, and that another reason was because they used him to "do their dirty work"... what in hell's name will possess Homura to accept Sanzo as a slave? :/
Thats the fun of this my friend,
Its very much so explained.
But a heads up:
Homura wishes to save the imprisoned Sanzo. The only way: Accept him as a slave. It doesn't mean he has to treat him like a slave.
I kept this in mine while writing it.
Well, here's another question. Or two.
1) Given Sanzo's nature, it would be an insult to accept Homura's help. I believe his term "I'd rather bite my tongue off and choke" would come into play here. (And knowing how instable Sanzo is... he'd prolly do it.)
2) Why are the gods giving a heretic a slave? That'd be like admitting he's worth something, and heaven knows that's the last thing any deity (sans Goku, Kanzeon, etc) would want in regards to the War Prince.
You really don't like my idea do you, but i do have answers.
1. I never said Sanzo accepted the help. Of course as you said hes not that kind of person, i am fully aware of this. I don't want to ruin the fic but i'll let you know that what you have said has been duelly noted.
2. This is also true but giving Homura something that they no longer want or need can be done. >< Oh this is hard to say without giving away a twist in the plot line.
But remember not everyone hated Homura, and not everyone accepted the heavens as they were.
I hope this is good enough for you.
T.T I'm feeling a little depleted. . .
*shrug* You asked for us to give our input. All I'm doing is pointing out flaws that brilliantly contradict what we see in canon. If you want to write yet another cliche, predictable, and terribly OOC fic to add to the already horrendously huge pile, then fine by me--just don't complain when I try to point out that you have a lot to work with and may want to rethink some of the points.
1) True, but the way you have it set up, either Homura has to force him to be a slave or Sanzo has to accept Homura's help, neither of which sound anything according to his character.
2) Yes, but those who didn't accept were wise to stay in the sidelines. Those who didn't, died. Those who did just murmured their discontent--Kanzeon's the only one who's pointed out the flaws and not died. Konzen died, Kenren died, Tenpou died, thousands who followed Homura died, Homura himself... and in a way, so did Goku, in having his memories wiped clean and leaving him with a huge gaping hole for a past.
It looks as though you'd have to explain to me how you intend to let it all play out, otherwise I'm just not buying it.
Also worthy to note--if you want people to read it, go for this. It's what the masses like.
If you want people to enjoy it and think you've come up with an incredible idea, you may want to go in another direction.
come on... homura + fic = love...
and there are so few of them, our dear prince of war needs some lovin'
...will there be lovin'?
More then enough. *shifty eyes*
Fic = MA rating?
Might I ask what sort of "twist of fate" you're referring to? Because Homura was killed before his world was destroyed. He asked Sanzo to have his body left in his world - not to *be* left to die as his world died around him.
Any other points of concern that I might have have already been raised, though I'll leave a note if I think of anything else.
I am so not feeling the love.
But i understand the question that you have raised
yes, Homura was killed, if i wanted to be werid i can tell you the exact minute that our lovely god had ceased to be alive.
I would like to tell you the twist of fate that allowed Homura to be in this world. But it would throw my whole fic off then there would be no point in writing it.
Can you guys trust me.
2007-03-26 05:47 pm (UTC)
Well I'd like to read it
I came across your fic idea on another web-page. I know it's a bit late but I'd like to read your fic. I curiouse to see how you would make that work. If I can tell me how.
2007-03-28 03:14 pm (UTC)
Hey!, how are you doing.
I have a question about a fanfic you wrote, it's about that Sanzo become's a slave from Homura,
I cant seeme to find it anywere and I really want to raed it!
Can you please tell me were I can find it, that would be really great ! ^________^
Please sent me a e-mail back, my mail is: firstname.lastname@example.org
I like the idea of this fanfic - yeah I'm a very evil person, who likes to see characters suffer - and wanted to ask if you could send me the link, so that I can read it. Or maybe send the fic itself or something... I dunno.
Considering the pairing Homura/Konzen, I can live with any plot XD
Sanzo in chains...*drools all over the computer*
Just write the damn fic already ;)
Greets, Manon :D
2008-05-20 06:39 pm (UTC)
Sorry, I meant Homura/Sanzo